1. Overall it was good. You had a lot of detail and made the story quite personal.
2. The lead was good; it did get me reading some more. I think a little more quotes would be good as well
3. You have multiple scenes. Your numbers make up for the small lack in details.
4. You seem to be attacking Brett in this article. You say he is a great player, but a little less attacking might work. (This is with the assumption that you are angled as a Brett Farve fan.)
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